{"id":182,"date":"2008-03-19T22:15:49","date_gmt":"2008-03-20T03:15:49","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/?p=182"},"modified":"2009-02-15T14:52:42","modified_gmt":"2009-02-15T19:52:42","slug":"hypertext-a-bottle-of-beer-uh-oh","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/2008\/03\/hypertext-a-bottle-of-beer-uh-oh\/","title":{"rendered":"HYPERTEXT: <em>A Bottle of Beer<\/em> &#8211; Uh-oh"},"content":{"rendered":"<p><span class=\"drop\">A<\/span>fter cutting about 30% of the story out, I&#8217;m wondering if I&#8217;ve possibly cut not too much, but the wrong things.&nbsp; I&#8217;m just not getting that warm fuzzy feeling from the story, the empathy with the character.<\/p>\n<p>Maybe the imagery and language were hiding a rather blah plot beneath them.&nbsp; There is some depth to the story beyond the simplicity of the linear and the intricate Shards that enhance and provide balance.&nbsp; The protagonist of this story has been abused emotionally and physically by not just her husbands, but by the traditions of her society.&nbsp; She has survived.&nbsp; This story is one of the few I&#8217;ve written that goes beyond personal trials to be more representative of a portion of the population, and it&#8217;s certainly not a frivolous problem.&nbsp; But I may have lost the drama, even as I&#8217;ve attempted to focus it, by cutting some of the emotion out of it.<\/p>\n<p>It could also be that I&#8217;m just sort of sick of reading it by now.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p><span class=\"drop\">A<\/span>fter cutting about 30% of the story out, I&#8217;m wondering if I&#8217;ve possibly cut not too much, but the wrong things.&nbsp; I&#8217;m just not getting that warm fuzzy feeling from the story, the empathy with the character. Maybe the imagery and language were hiding a rather blah plot beneath them.&nbsp; There is some depth to [&hellip;]<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"closed","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"nf_dc_page":"","footnotes":""},"categories":[5],"tags":[53,32],"class_list":["post-182","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-hypertext","tag-hypertext","tag-hypertextopia"],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/182","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/1"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=182"}],"version-history":[{"count":1,"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/182\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":896,"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/182\/revisions\/896"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=182"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=182"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/susangibb.net\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=182"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}