Okay, it’s so much better now. Smoother, streamlined.
Wait–here’s a better word. Okay.
Ehhh, let me highlight this in red so I maybe can come up with something better later.
Okay–oh yes! I’m glad I thought of this, it really adds to the story.
It’s done. I’m pretty sure that that’s the best I can do with it.
Aarrgh! Why didn’t I see that?!?!?
Okay, now it’s done.
No, wait, don’t read it yet–I’ve thought of something better…
The Lost Children: A Charity Anthology
Don’t overdo it. You might cut something very important.