HYPERTEXT: A Bottle of Beer – Changing Character

March 19th, 2008 by susan

Okay, this is another one of my fav’s that’s ending up on the cutting room floor.  I’m sure Yolanda will be grateful, since it’s in the very first Fragment, by way of introducing her to the readership:

Wind whistled out of her in a long, low moan.

Yolanda lives alone.  She’s drinking beer.  It’s natural for flatulence to occur, especially in older folks and especially when they’re drinking beer.  But was it necessary for the narrator to tell us about it? No.  Not unless this hits the big screen and helps for audio effects.

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