STORYSPACE: Weak Links
In rewriting the second story, I can so much more easily see that it was indeed the "weak link" in the chain.
Told in first person of a character who has such an impact on the entire piece, it needed to be delved into deeper. Instead, it fell flat. Sort of an afterthought, and it was and it shows. But the guy needs to have a say, a rebuttal perhaps it may be called, to all the questions raised about him by the other characters.
I’m not sure that this wouldn’t have occured to me in linear format, but what makes it so much easier in Storyspace as a reading form is that drop-ins, thoughts out of the blue or minimally related, the niggling little questions sparked by a phrase, are not only allowable, but encouraged.
It is indeed, the process of building a story. Architecture of narrative using language and presentation.
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