STORYSPACE: A Writer’s Quandry

March 27th, 2008 by Susan


Added a few more writing spaces to the latest Storyspace work, likely because I’m in a let it all hang out mood after last night’s writing class.  But then I’m painfully aware that Paths has never received the editing that I did with A Bottle of Beer and is an embarrassment hanging over my head.   But if I step back into Anne’s world, if I’m ready to sever the cord with Yolanda, will I be able to take on the troubles of this new character that has all the personality of a newborn and isn’t anywhere near as cute?

I’ve found that the editing process is intense in its demand of time and emotional commitment.  The investment is well worth it, that’s been proven to me, but is it possible to be more than two people at once?

STORYSPACE & HYPERTEXT: Editing Theory

March 27th, 2008 by Susan


While Steve Ersinghaus may not agree with me after his 900+ writing spaces in his Storyspace novel The Life of Geronimo Sandoval, I’ve discovered through my own Hypertextopia piece A Bottle of Beer that my editing methods have changed, become more thorough, even without a ruler poised over my knuckles.  It’s a very important difference.

Text boxes focus the writer–as well as the reader–on a small portion of text at a time.  No seven paragraphs on a page that invites skimming to the unrestrained writer.  One thought at a time, one absolutely vital piece of text that has to justify its taking up space in this cramped enclosure. 

It’s likely one of the most important things I’ll ever learn about the editing process–not that I hadn’t been taught to centralize editing in this way; just that it’s not only natural for a writer to miss his own errors and to feel heartache at every phrase deleted from his eloquent recital of passage, we tend to get lazy.  Or bored with our own stuff after a hundred readings. 

With hypertext, we may have read it a zillion times, but we’re concerned with taking out unnecessary words among maybe a hundred or two, and you’re not going to get the feeling that you did the job right if you’ve only taken out a couple.  You know there’s more excess in there; you read the same paragraph again and find more.  And more and more.  Then you feel you can move on to the next.  This doesn’t happen as readily or naturally in traditional format writing.

The bonus?  The eventual reader gets to focus on your clearly defined point.

HYPERTEXT: Missing: Links

March 26th, 2008 by Susan


Noting this on two out of three weblogs this a.m.:  The Tunxis Writers Festival this year lacks the grace and fun of any presentation on a new media level such as IF or hypertext.  Music, another form of story is present, why not film  and Storyspace? 

With any influence from this end at all, and if next year finds me still on campus, this shall be rectified.

PROJECTS: Breaking the Habit

March 24th, 2008 by Susan


Congratulate me, I’ve made it through the whole day today without logging in to Hypertextopia and editing or even visiting to read. 

It’s like the first day of school for your youngest child.  The wrench of separation, the wondering if the other kids will like yours, if he’ll be scared and miss you.

Then I tell myself:  It’s only a story.

HYPERTEXT: Hypertextopia – Ease of Use

March 24th, 2008 by susan


No doubt about it, some of these things like Storyspace and Hypertextopia are just so user friendly that there is no interference with the forces that lead a writer into and through the telling of his story.  While I see the maneuvering within a software program as creative, it’s not something you want to be switching on and off as you follow a thread of idea. 

With the wrapping up of A Bottle of Beer, I sort of feel a cutting of the cord since it is on Jeremy’s website that he’s established and graciously offered to writers for their use.  I do know one thing, that since the site was so simple to get in and walk around in and do some heavy editing, I was there or logged in almost constantly the last month.  I’m sure his stats will drop just from my final severing of the editorial ties. 

Not sure what’s going to grab all my attention now that that piece is done (or fairly so), so what I’m going to do is try to work on one in the Storyspace environment, edit Paths–my first piece in Storyspace, and get some work done in a few other areas before I fall into my focus mode and lose myself again in story.

WRITING: Hypertext Thinking

March 22nd, 2008 by Susan


It’s true, I’ve fallen in love with one of my characters and likely given her so much attention because of it.  A Bottle of Beer’s Yolanda is a survivor.  As I read her story and realize what she has experienced, I am sorry that there is but this one last evening left to have learned about her.  We know she shares a tradition of submission to men with generations of women, yet she has found it within herself to fight back in a most terrible way when it came to her children.  What that brings to mind is a mother bear and her cubs–one of the most used metaphors for the protective maternal instinct.  It is not surprising to me then that the bear has turned up twice in this story, though not in this context at all.

What hypertext has me doing with story is carrying the burden of story that has all the elements of voice, style, tone, arc, pace, structure, etc., but allows the inclusion of what has been learned through experience yet not closely aligned within the story as a contributory plot.  It is an "oh yeah, and I remember once…" that is behind the words that get into the main highway of information that fit in someone else’s experience as a similar incident or lesson in life. 

I like the tone of Yolanda’s story, I like the humanness of it.  Her experience is frightful and yet she has overcome to be able to relax on her front porch in the sunset time, just stringing chile peppers.  It’s everyman’s story with different devils.  It’s the calm that follows the storms.  She is still ready to fight if she has to, but somehow knows that her battle has been won and she can walk off the field with grace and dignity into peace.

These are the methods: the hypertext format of thinking.  There are more characters that need such revelation for their simple efforts to live a good and honest life, yet have seen more than a simple linear narrative can do justice.  Storyspace is calling.

HYPERTEXT: A Bottle of Beer – Close Reading

March 21st, 2008 by susan


Steve Ersinghaus is doing a wonderful series on reading hypertext, one that has helped me to understand better how to read deeper into any form of literature while it emphasizes the nature of hypertext to form a story that examines itself by its forms of writing spaces.  He has graciously been using A Bottle of Beer as one of the examples in his series and I’d like to attempt to present a particular premise that he so astutely noticed–that I as author hadn’t really consciously written in.

The text spaces in question:

(FRAGMENT) – HARD TIMES
Yolanda prayed to the Virgin Mary because of their bond of motherhood, though she’d never suffered the groping and plunging of Javier and Juan, nor the sweet touch of Carlos.

From her gruff abuelo through her father and brothers and husbands and sons to even the Padre or Mary’s own Son, if there was any man Yolanda had trusted, it had been Carlos.

Then Carlos had broken her heart with his fist, leaving it like clay shards of a flowerpot, no longer capable of holding the soil in which to grow love.

(SHARD)
It was all right with her grandfather, he had told her it was.  But Yolanda wasn’t sure about what she did with her brother.

(SHARD)
There was a meteor shower one night.  Yolanda had awakened and though she did not know the hour, she later believed that it was the time between midnight and two that Carlos had died a year before.

She went outside and walked a distance from the house to relieve herself.  As she squatted and waited, she looked up to see the stars dying in bursts across the sky.

She watched for a while and decided it was a sign that she was forgiven.

The Fragment is from the linear narrative of the story, the Shards are linked from certain words within the text of the Fragment.  Steve says:

Curiously, in Hard Times, Gibb restricts the reader to the writing space without supplying a link for exposition or further exploration. It would appear that Yolanda is reluctant to give up some aspects of this relationship to the narrator. Instead, the additional opportunities for exploration point to other men in Yolanda’s life. Conceptually in the hypertext, this amounts to a undisclosed shard, a shard, or additional linked memory, that might have been, or, rather, may be imagined by the reader, unseen but imagined, untouched, but an aspect of the texture of Yolanda in the reader.

Well, I hadn’t thought of that but I love the idea of it and with luck it will remain with me through all current and future hypertext writings.  In retrospect, what might have stopped me from explanation is what Ersinghaus has called a "unit of sense" in the first part of his series.  The relationship between Yolanda and her third husband, Carlos has been given out a bit at a time, in images that provide a representation of years in a single act.  They are honest and yet they are without a lot of emotion.  Here, the image of the broken pot is likely all Yolanda can offer without sentiment.  We have already seen her crying in her bed at night and she probably would not have let us seen that had we not caught her in a weak moment. 

Instead, what I’ve brought out from the Fragment of Hard Times is a reference to sexual abuse by Yolanda’s grandfather and brother, and a meteor shower that oddly takes place a year after Carlos’ death, but Yolanda takes as a sign of forgiveness.  We don’t know how Carlos died.  We do know about Juan.  Many times I’ve gone back to this particular shard and said to myself, no, that should be Juan, not Carlos’ death that’s mentioned. But something keeps stopping me.  Something Yolanda might know that she hasn’t even told me.

HYPERTEXT: Corrections

March 20th, 2008 by Susan


Jeremy was kind enough to point out the feature of "Read this Story" while logged in that eliminates the small problem I mentioned earlier about the preferred manner of editing when one is in the final (hah!) editing stages.  I’d clicked on that when I first got into Hypertextopia, then promptly forgot about it when in the whirlwind of writing.  He also pointed out that I’m a bit late on my congrats in the last post, but then again, he deserves the notice so I’m leaving it in though the news is dated!

HYPERTEXT: Congratulations!

March 20th, 2008 by Susan


Well I had certainly been impressed, but others evidently too:  Congratulations to Jeremy Ashkenas of Hypertextopia on his new affiliation with White Whale as a designer.

"He brings a new design perspective to the table, focusing on visitor
interactions and front-end design. A generalist in the fine
liberal-arts tradition, Jeremy has worked in and around many aspects of
the web site arena: from behind-the-scenes Ruby and Rails development,
to PHP CMS customization, XHTML/CSS template design, and Javascripting
up draggable, tuggable, animated interfaces. He’s learning how White
Whale works as a company, and is enjoying diving into our new projects."

Jeremy is extremely talented and I owe him a great deal for the opportunity to write into his hypertext program.  Congratulations, Jeremy, at this step in what I’m seeing as a brilliant career!

HYPERTEXT: A Bottle of Beer – Editing MCLIX

March 20th, 2008 by susan


One final read through before I move on.  By the fourth text box I’m logged in and into My Writing Space; open iPages as backup, make changes.

Writing allows rewriting.  How lovely if life did as well.